This is a short story full of suspense, action and some horror. By adding the options for readers to take, you help draw them into your story. You give your readers an option to change the storyline and also to make them feel as though they are living inside your character and have to make the same life changing decisions as he has to. The opening picture of broken glass is a good visual opening for the story as it gives a flavour of the story line. Keep proof reading your stories to avoid any punctuation mistakes e.g. last paragraph is missing a capital letter at the beginning and full stop at the end. Great action writing. Can I lift my head out from under the blanket yet?
Hi Charlie, this is a gripping intense story with different options leading to the same rather desperate outcome! Even although I was rather petrified whilst reading the text I was also very intrigued about how it would end, so therefore was drawn into going through and being a participant in all of the options. It is a clever use of technology. I am impressed how you are gaining more and more confidence and competence in creating the wide range of work you produce on your crome book for us to share in. Scary but Cool!. Mum.
This is a short story full of suspense, action and some horror. By adding the options for readers to take, you help draw them into your story. You give your readers an option to change the storyline and also to make them feel as though they are living inside your character and have to make the same life changing decisions as he has to.
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Keep proof reading your stories to avoid any punctuation mistakes e.g. last paragraph is missing a capital letter at the beginning and full stop at the end.
Great action writing. Can I lift my head out from under the blanket yet?
Hi Charlie, this is a gripping intense story with different options leading to the same rather desperate outcome! Even although I was rather petrified whilst reading the text I was also very intrigued about how it would end, so therefore was drawn into going through and being a participant in all of the options. It is a clever use of technology. I am impressed how you are gaining more and more confidence and competence in creating the wide range of work you produce on your crome book for us to share in. Scary but Cool!. Mum.
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