This is an excellent piece of narrative writing Charlie.
I found your piece very interesting and informative. I learnt new information, that I did not previously know e.g. that Trek have manufactured a hard tail bike that can switch to a soft tail.
It was good to see that you included the bibliography, that show the source of your information.
The only fault I could see in this work was some missing full stops. Dont forget to proof read your work before publishing to ensure your punctuation is complete.
This is an excellent piece of narrative writing Charlie.
ReplyDeleteI found your piece very interesting and informative. I learnt new information, that I did not previously know e.g. that Trek have manufactured a hard tail bike that can switch to a soft tail.
It was good to see that you included the bibliography, that show the source of your information.
The only fault I could see in this work was some missing full stops. Dont forget to proof read your work before publishing to ensure your punctuation is complete.
Otherwise, top effort Charlie. Keep this up.